Perhaps it would help him improve if you explained exactly what he could have improved on.
CCS's articles were intended to be formal as a legitimate news site with analysis but not rampant homerism and emotional influence (or at least not in the way he did put in emotion).
"See Ya Chris Volstad" in the title would be okay under some circumstances perhaps, but not often and not when the first line is the following:
"A few days ago, every Cub fan and every personnel in the Cubs front office has a smile on their face." about him being gone
Then all of this has no place in a news article:
"The White Sox people also had a smile on their face as that’s an easy win IF he makes the team."
"The Cubs, some how, came up in that deal. That’s how much everybody wanted to give rid of Zambrano."
"Manly to protect players from the Rule V draft and possibly trades/free agent signings." just for lolz, simply type-o but was kinda funny noticing it
"The Cubs DFA catcher Anthony Recker and he was claimed off waivers by the New York Mets." changing tenses within in a sentence
Still doesn't know how to spell Bryan LaHair, and keeps going on with the Japan stuff even though LaHair said he definitely isn't planning on it after last game. Still could happen, but he is acting like he personally wants it and is personally going to pursue it rather than having to be talked into it.
Oh, and this is a big no to end an article on a site for news: "So … let’s see if there are any moves on the way!"
This isn't meant to be a regular blog, it is meant to be more like a newspaper site when covering transactions and trades, then a little bit of emotion and further analysis can be squeezed in like a blog, but first and foremost it has to be more like a legitimate article here.
